Once upon a time, there was a lad from the small but very renowned town of Enumclaw. He grew up in a quiet little place just on the outskirts of town with his mother, his father, his brother and his sister. This lad that went by the name of Evan was no where near perfect but always aspired to be the best at whatever he was doing. From the time he was a wee little tyke to these present and harsh times he would never leave a task unfinished. He knew that he wanted to be writer lived up to the expectations of his teachers and was frequently complimented on his writing abilities. With this newly found power he would wield it to defeat any monstrous paper, becoming hero of all the land.
Though our conquering hero Evan has defeated many papers on expeditions, this story belongs to a quest that requires our hero to find one’s self and acquire new skills. Evan entered into what appeared to be an intimidating class the first day; but he soon found English 326 to be quite enjoyable. With the help of his fellow guild members and the elder mage (Barbara) he knew he could finish this quest with all the colors of the rainbow.
During the first week of classes Evan would make the journey by foot over mountains, through massive heat waves, and into the fiery pits known as “Campus“. The distance BETWEEN EVAN’S CASTLE AND CAMPUS was a long and treacherous one but he made his way each and every day. He had surprised HIMSELF with the time it took him on his voyage, for it was not as long as one would have expected.
Within English 326 Evan has been learning a lot about grammar, such as using punctuations in correct places. With the help of reading the scriptures of “Dora Learns to Write and in the Process Encounters Punctuation” he has increased his knowledge of proper punctuation. By the time the fourth week of classes rolled around Evan was beginning to get the hang of how grammar works; but with the introduction to nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, pronouns, prepositions and particles, could truly put Evan’s heroic abilities to the test.
These skills are finding their way to being quite useful as our hero of this story learns how to use them in battle against his literary paper in English 301. His paper is a comparison BETWEEN A SPEECH BY PRESIDENT OBAMA AND THE GETTYSBURG ADDRESS. He is beginning to understand the concepts more and more which will help him achieve his life long goal of becoming a great writer. What more lies ahead of our adventurer?
Until we meet again
Last weeks pattern: AS A TEACHER, I WORKED AND WROTE WITH CHILDREN IN GRADES ONE THROUGH SIX; WHILE AS A RESEARCHER, I OBSERVED THE WRITING PRACTICE AND PRODUCT OF THREE CLASSES.
I liked how you wrote this blog as a story! It was fun to read. I loved this sentence: "During the first week of classes Evan would make the journey by foot over mountains, through massive heat waves, and into the fiery pits known as “Campus“. " But for the between sentence I believe we were supposed to use him or her-"[personal pronouns-objective case]."
ReplyDeleteyes, Chelsea's right. You used nouns, not pronouns-objective case.
ReplyDeleteAlso, for your re-do of last week's pattern:
notice you inserted the word WHILE... which changes the sentence into a different pattern, one where the semicolon would be incorrect (boo-hoo).
Try this pattern again next week.